My father being the breadwinner in our family, has been my role model for years. Though I am not showy of it, I admire and love him so much. There may be some traits of my father that some may not want, but I assure you they are very few. Honestly I inherited one of this traits. Both my father and I are addicted to buying things at first sight but now I try my best to refrain from doing that. Another trait of my father is being a joker,it doesn't mean literally he jokes everytime. He is a happy person but sometimes can be so kill joy. Lastly, I am proud to say that my father is very a hardworking person. I believe that being not hardworking would not constitute a father personality. See, he almost lost his hearing, he cut his finger one time. There were he is, is a very cold night and where I am is a sunny day. Not only that, you could not deny the fact that he is alone there,away from his beloved wife. Yet, he leaves us and comes back home with a smile.
1 comment:
-use a different word for "showy" in the second sentence.
-observe punctuation marks especially in the fourth sentence after the word "Honestly"
-In the third sentence, use "these" instead of "this" because you're pertaining to many traits, not only one.
-you have interchanged the article "a" and the word "very" in the eight sentence.
YOU HAVE A NICE ENTRY..
KEEP IT UP...^_^
-nobie478-
-AMW-n[]biE
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